Soil

Prompt Courtesy of Velvet Verbosity‘s 100 Word Challenge.

James Gibson stood in the road as the Banker clipped a padlock across the front door and then wrapped a large chain around the front gate and stuck a lock in that too.

The Banker turned and walked towards him. He stuck his soft, scrubbed, plump hand out. ‘No hard feelings and all that,” he said, a weak smile corkscrewed across his face. “Just doing my job, same as anyone.”

Gibson sneered and tried to spit on the man’s oiled moustache, but turned out his mouth was just as dry and dusty and barren as the fields behind the house.

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4 thoughts on “Soil

  1. Well done. I, too, like the capitalization of Banker. He is no man and every man. Not just a representation of every banker, but of the traps we get into (“just doing my job”), the morals we sacrifice for survival, and how forces outside our control put us in the winner’s or the loser’s seat.

  2. I like the description of the “locking” in paragraph one: “. . . clipped a padlock across the front door and then wrapped a large chain around the front gate and stuck a lock in that too.” The language is clear, efficient and natural, but serves to characterize the Banker. The verbs are doing the work, which is as it should be.

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